Nursing Question

You have a little bit of a grammar mistake in the first sentence of your second paragraph in the abstract. But the rest of it looks really good. There’s just some issues with syntax in your sentence but I know what you’re trying to say. Needed a transition into the third paragraph of your introduction. You should have listed out all through the medical conditions that you talk about in that last sentence of evidence of connection. You do a good job of being consistent in your abstract though with all three. And I think you did a really good job of choosing a broad spectrum of different medical conditions you get a little off topic with your causes. It could be a little bit more comprehensive. There’s many causes like ignorance and xenophobia. I like what you did with the World Health Organization it was really eye opening for me to read this. You wanna work on your transitions in and out of the subtopics. That will make your paper a little bit more cohesive. Good transition into ethical obligation though. Although you don’t really talk about the nursing obligation in this section. It should have been a little bit more obvious in this section as to the role nurses play.